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Question: Is this love poem good !?
Who makes my heart jump as if I yelled "BOO!"
It could be no one else but you!.
You make my heart sing with no more than others!.
You are the one I want to call my special big brother!.

if not can u change it a little better, im saying this to this guy thats my best friend and no he is not bloodly related to me

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Honestly, a love poem is not a poem to critique!. It doesn't matter what it says, as long as it is what you truly feel!. The only things I would say though, are the 3rd line "you make my heart sing like no other" and then maybe you can cut the 4th line and just ask him (if that's what you are doing) to be your boyfriend!. If not, you could leave it and just change the 3rd line to get that message out clearer!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I honestly don't want to hurt your feelings, but you should put some more effort into it!. I'm a writer and it's not written well!. If you want to say something from the bottom of you heart try to avoid words like "boo!." Just say what you REALLY want to say to him!. It doesn't have to rhyme or anything!. The poem just sounds like it was written by a little kid!. Focus on what you want to say and that's it!. Again I'm just trying to help!. :)
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Its aight but that special big brother part throws if off unless its to someone you look at like a brother in that case why does he make your heart jump!.!.!.

who makes my heart jump as if someone said "boo"
you know who it is cause baby its you
You make my heart sing and my laughter happy
It you I want as my baby papiWww@QuestionHome@Com

If it is best friend love, then awesome dont change a thing (less u want to) but if it is love love then change the 4th line!. But really awesome dear!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. A love poem just expresses your feelings towards someone else!. The only thing that I have to say is the 3rd line is a little confusing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Of course it is great! I never heard anything like it- SERIOUSLY!!!!!!!
I think he'll love it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yea this love poem is good!.He will love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

cool it WILL work!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i dont like it!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

is it brotherly love!?Www@QuestionHome@Com