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Question: FOr you poets out there!!?
I press my hand onto yours,
I feel like I’d rather do my chores
You say we can’t be together
Then I wish time would fade!.
Where things are forgotten,
And everything just falls into a lost canyon!.
Finally I look into your eyes,
Knowing you’re filled with lies!.
I ask why I even loved you,
But I already knew
You see I’ve found the true answer,
That upon my heart you were the dancer!.
I get up and say,
“Why don’t you just go away!?”
“I don’t need a someone who says she can love me,
“But really doesn’t care if he does barely!.”
You look up at me,
“No please, I can explain why you’re not happy!.”
“Goodbye!.”
And I finally sigh!.
Not because I am sad,
But because I am glad!.
That it’s all over,
And I can find another four leaf clover,
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I press my hand onto yours,
somethings missing I know longer feel the same about you like before!.
You say we can't be together I wish time could just fade into nothingness,
I wish I could rewind my life and erase all the memories of this mess!.
As I gaze into your eyes, I know you are full of lies!.
I wonder how could I have ever loved you,
but deep down inside I knew!.
I saw my future when I looked at you,
I wanted it all you were the one to make my dreams come true!.
I now realize, that everything about you was only a disguise!.
I'm kicking you out of my life,
giving it all back to you the pain, hurt and the strife!.
I don't need someone like you to toy and play with my emotions,
you made me to feel like I was constantly on a roller coaster!.
And now you look at me wanting to explain stop the damage has been done,
you've done it for the last time you can't right this wrong!.
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I would change the chore thing to make it more emotional because, remember,
the more emotional the poem,
the better it will be!.
And the more it is from your heart,
the more it will mean!.
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that was REALY good! i senced compassion, yet hurtfullness!. please read and rate my poem at!.!.!.
http://www!.teenink!.com/raw/Poetry/articl!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
for a "poet" you lack intellect!.
"your words -They dont really mean anything"Www@QuestionHome@Com