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Question: Do you like my poem!? Please be honest!!?
The moon at night shines like the tears rolling down my eyes when i think of you!.
You were there then you left don't know where you ever went!.
But now as i watch you walk away!.
Into the night, anger fill's my mind!.
Trying to get rid of the memories you left behind
Cause you made me laugh you made me cry You never told the truth you only told lies!.And you never even said goodbye!.
That's all i wanted you to say!.
But you just left me standing here!.
Trying to dry my own tears!.
There is no cure to what you did!.
You never even said goodbye!.
Your a chapter of my life that got ripped out!.
You bring no peace only doubt!.
I think i died a little inside!.
Loss of faith and loss of pride!.
You didin't even say!.!.!.Goodbye!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Love it!. Don't change it!.
(One spelling error: " You're a chapter in my life!.!.!."
Keep writing :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Awsome!
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i love it :) just make sure to make all verses equal in terms of syllabi !.!.!.
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I LIKE IT! but i made some corections if u want to make it better!.!.!.I also write poetry!.!.!.here are the corrections I made!.!.!.
The moon at night shines like the tears rolling down my eyes when i think of you!.
You were there then you left don't know where you ever went!.
But now as i watch you walk away!.
Into the night, anger fill's my mind!.
Trying to get rid of the memories you left behind
Cause you made me laugh you made me cry
You never told the truth you only told lies!.
The worst part: you never even said goodbye!.
That's all i wanted you to say!.
But you just left me standing there!.
Trying to dry my own tears!.
There is no cure to what you did!.
You never will say goodbye will you!?
Your a chapter of my life that got ripped out!.
You bring no peace only doubt!.
I think i died a little inside!.
Loss of faith and loss of pride!.
You didin't even say "Goodbye"
hope that helped!!!
(best answer amybe!?!?) =)Www@QuestionHome@Com