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Question: What Do You Think Of These Poems (Be Honest)!?
Fold My Hands
I fold my hands, as I begin to pray!.
I put my past aside, and open my eyes to all my broken feelings!.
The truth isn’t too hard to find,
Just look for it, and it will be found!. I’ve come to know such truth,
And my life is forever changed!.
Because of the truth, I am alive!. Because of the truth, I know what love is!. Because of the truth, I stand firm!. Because of the truth, my life is saved!. Because of the truth, I get through the day!.
So fold my hands, as I begin to pray!.

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Patient
Patience is rewarded,
Suffering is healed
Love is shown,
Desires met!.
The day I meet you, these things will occur!.
What day will it be!? God only knows!.
That’s how He likes it kept,
A secret!.
Fine by me, I’ve been blessed with grace!.
I’ll wait with patience my day will come!.
Some day soon, you’ll be in my arms!.
My faith got me this far, and I ‘ain’t stoppin’
She’s out there, so I just have to wait!.
Wait with patience, is what I’ll do!.

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Maybe I'm Special (Not About Hana, lol)
Maybe I’m special… maybe I’m not
She looked at me, I thought it meant something!.
It seemed she was interested,
But word has it that she flirts with everyone!.
So I thought to myself, ”well maybe I’m special!?”
Maybe I’m special, but probably not!.

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Broken
I think about you daily,
You never leave my mind!.
During class and walking home,
You haunt my waking mind!.
My heart aches, my voice cracks,
My love for you is growing strong!.
Shooting stars, they fall so hard!.
God speaks to me!. Laying on my bed, thinking about the girl,
He tells me:
“She might break your heart,
But I’ll be here!.”
“She knows, she definitely knows!.”
Break my heart or not, I’ll know;
I will never be broken!.

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Everything But Mine
The kindness of a Saint,
Looks beyond lust,
And a heart beyond love!.
Can’t get her out of my mind!.
Can’t let go of the truth,
Girl you’re everything,
Everything but mine!.
Will this be forever!? When will I know!?
Is she the one for me!?
All these questions I have no idea,
I rest in Christ until its known!.
One day, she might be mine!.

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Long Suffering
Oh I know, that she’s killing me,
And these feelings are surrounding!.
Hana’s a witness to a prayer that’s been answered!.
My hope renewed,
no more worrying!.
I see her, I hear her,
and my heart begins to ache!.
I can’t help but think of her
Each and every day!.
If this love is going to cause long suffering for me,
then so be it!.
Because she’s too beautiful to give up!.

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This Isn't Over
Some might say I have no hope,
Some might say there is no chance!.
But I don’t listen to them,
I go by God, and make my faith known!.
What’s meant to be, will be!.
I have my faith, she could be mine!.
One can hope, so stand your ground!.
You people can’t tell me,
That there is no chance!.
A guy can hope!.
It seems impossible,
Through the eyes but not through faith!.
This isn’t over,
And you’ll soon be in my arms!.

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Incorruptible
My love for you is incorruptible,
Thoughts only pure,
Faith kept strong!.
My path is set; I walk the straight and narrow!.
My determination for you is incorruptible!.
My dedication, unbreakable!.
Your name, synonymous with love, beauty, and faith!.
If I see an opportunity, I’ll take it, before it’s too late!.
Don’t get caught up in yourself!.
Here’s my moment to shine, now I’ll shine!.
I won’t wait for time to pass, second-guess, and change my mind!.
Not this time!.
Inside all the flames, love still remains!.
A world without you is space simply wasted!.
My love for you is incorruptible,
If you only knew!.

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Wait
It hurt when it hit me!.
I think I’ve fallen for you!.
But how do I know for sure!?
The time will come!.
Heart untold, love unknown,
Girl, I know you know!.
Patiently I’ll wait,
For this mystery to unfold!.
You’re in my life for reason, that much I know!.
The reason itself,
Is still unknown!.
The potential of this is through the roof,
Maybe some day we’ll see that come to life,
But until then, patiently, I will wait!.

God bless, and thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
wow!.
i'll tell u the truth and say i didnt read all of them
but the ones i did read really felt powerful
only because i feel they came purely from the heart

i really like this
and i could definately say
i could make some music
with the inspiration of these poems
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Just analyzing these poem with out taking in the context of them they are pretty good, I suggest you cut down on certain words like BUT, AND,

example

The truth isn’t too hard to find,
Just look for it, and it will be found!. I’ve come to know such truth,


you can go this way and have the same affect

Truth isn't hard to find
Look for it, it will be found, knowing truth
Life forever changedWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's reeeeally long :D
But it's probably better than everything I could ever write,
I like it, I really do, great job!. :3
But the word 'my' is pretty often used!. :D
Anyway, I bet you could be a good songwriter!. (:
Are you one!? o_oWww@QuestionHome@Com

Truly banal subject matter presented with as little feeling and empathy as possible!. Truly trite and uninteresting!.!.!. they are all real yawners!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I liked them!.!.!.Incorruptible I really understood!.!.!.!.I liked the 1st one too, may I suggest more colour!.!.!.draw me a picture of your hurt,with your desire,with your yearningWww@QuestionHome@Com

2 thumbs down, sorryWww@QuestionHome@Com

You use the word truth too much, Truthfully!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

not very good
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umm are you in a private school or something cuz ur poems seem religious
anyways!.!.!. i notice some really strong and interesting ideas, but you could be less repetitive for some of them and maybe shorten some of ur sentences to just action words or simple and meaningful words that will make ur readers ask questiions!.!.even though that can be annoying sometimes it could be better if you let ur readers/listeners do some thinking/inferingWww@QuestionHome@Com