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Question: Please tell me what do you think of my poem :)!?
The world "changes" yet everything stays the same!.
There's nothing but discrimination and blame!.
The world is run by the fear of difference and change!.
To make the world better peoples hearts we need to rearrange!.
Broaden your mind and heart!.
This is the time to restart!.
People need to understand these are lives that deserve to be lived, this isn't a game!.
The world "changes" yet everything stays the same!.
This has a title, but I choose not to put it!. If I put the title it might anger people!. It was written on 11/1/08!. What do you think of my poem!? Thanks to all who answer! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This is very good x)
i like your rhymes!.
They are like rap rhymes sorta, like the blame and change rhyme but dont spell similar or something lol
very good ^^Www@QuestionHome@Com
Well written, um, have you considered not making the title offensive!. Your poem is very strong and i think an angry title would take away from it!. (sorry, i meant that if you thought it might make people angry, that would take away the chance for them to read and take the meaning of the poem to heart)
Does changes need quotes!. Could you make the point of seeming to change a different way!? but that's just something to notice, certainly not something wrong
Very good :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
that is soo true, we do live in that kind of world and people really need to change so we can be happy all together, good work, i love it:)Www@QuestionHome@Com
pretty good!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
very nice! i like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Pretty good! I think one day, u might become famous! ; )Www@QuestionHome@Com