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Once a girl, there, was named Chloe now here, the name's the same but time is going, has gone by and Chloe's older- still a girl but now wielding a laminated passport to the world of possibilities!. She's funny and loud and free of necessities in that she simply hasn't any!. She's got her lucky Indian-head penny wearing a moon in her tiny side pocket!. As she walks home she writes a poem about your lunar explorations!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: ok i am a writer 2 and i know how it feels to have your stuff judged so im not ganna beat around the bush or nuthin i like the poem it has a pretty good feel to it but it is kind of hard to understand and read and sounds kind of i-want-it-to-sound-deep!. it kind of sounds like you sat down and really thought about what to say instead of just letting it flow!. the first stanza was really good but the second and third dont have much to do with the into!. it sounded like it was about somebody whom phiscially was older but doing a peter pan type of thing!. but then it doesnt say much more about it!. my only real suggestion is to either ignore what ive said or to take your first stanza and read it to youself then write down whatever comes to your mind after that!. if it is when youve written then your good but if its not see what it sounds like with the rewrite!. cheers&good luck blessed beWww@QuestionHome@Com confusing to read, lots of commas!. i like how you put really amazing descriptive lines at the end of each paragraph!. mmm but totally didn't get the symbolismm to the driver's license!.!. keep working at it!Www@QuestionHome@Com Basically, it is a little bit complicated!. But it is your own literary piece and I understand!. Poets have their own way of expressing themselves!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I agree!. Cool poem!. People could steal it, so be careful! But-- Any aged person can get a Passport, it's not like an ID!. So it was confusing (To me) there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com i like the poem!. I liked the line "wielding a laminated passport to the world of possibilities!.Www@QuestionHome@Com One cool expression does not a poem make !.Www@QuestionHome@Com its a nice poem did u just make it up or is their a girl u like named Chloe!?!?!?!?!?!?!? Www@QuestionHome@Com its 2 complex 4 me which is a good sign though cause that means its good :DWww@QuestionHome@Com I think i get it, barly but my mind did that clicky thingy!. i like it its sereneWww@QuestionHome@Com im not really feelin it Www@QuestionHome@Com I'm guessing you like ChloeWww@QuestionHome@Com i dont really understand what it means!. sorry!. ;[ Www@QuestionHome@Com Cool poem, BUT realize that since you just posted it online people can copy it and claim it as their ownWww@QuestionHome@Com what the hell!?Www@QuestionHome@Com |