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Question: Barely Breathing!.!.!.!.!.Thoughts please!?
I wrote this about three girls in my life!. one i want to be with but know i can't be, one that wants to be with me but im not into her like that, and the other is well, my ex who i went though a lot with!.

Want what I can't have
Got what i don't want
Let G of what I really needed
And now i'm barely breathing

My Miss Forbidden Fruit
My "I Love You Already"
My Air that I needed
But Now I'm Barely Breathing

She's so taboo
She drowns me in her emotion
My Heart She Completed
But Now i'm barely breathing

My Lasting Temptation
Her Harmless Crush
Attempt at being my all she succeeded
But Now I'm Barely Breathing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I loved your poem as it was really thru the heart and soul' and i think you did a fantastic job!.!.!.PS like the tailor made!.!.!.lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like it! that was amazing ou should send it in for publication like Teen Ink (a magizine and a wesite) like i did!.
here check out my poem and rate it and check out the website too!.!.!.
http://www!.teenink!.com/raw/Poetry/articl!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com