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Question: Poem!.!.!.good, not so good!?
k, first poem i wrote!.!.kinda haha
its short and pretty crappy!.
im 13, cut me some slack :p
lemme know what you thing, honestly
thx:)

captive-
somedays i feel like im being held captive, screaming
inside this prison
unable to say a word
other days,
i feel like im the bad guy,
not spilling a single word
and not wanting to
is the truth that bad!?
will it honestly hurt you!?
mabye things would fall into place if you knew
until then,
im trying to break free of this captivity,
and when i do
you will know the truth,
i love you!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I generally don't like to read a poem that ignores proper punctuation!. Your poem makes up for it by keeping the reader, me of course, glued to what you can't say aloud, but in a very clever way !.!.!.!.!.do say!. Punctuation aside, it's a very good poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com

im thirteen too!!! and for a first poem it is EXTREMELY GOOD!!!

will you please check out mine!?(i am also powerfulpoetry on here)

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thats good!.
i am 13 to so far i only wrote 6 poems!. so yeah!. but your good!. could you tell me what you think of mine please!?
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Awesome!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow!
that was really good!
awesome!
you are definitely and artist- keep on writing :):)Www@QuestionHome@Com