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Question: Is this a good poem!. i have to share it in class!?
War of You”

You rip me open,
Tear out my soul,
My hearts in pieces,
And you still want more!.

But I have nothing left!.
You have stolen me,
Our fights debates,
Are like a war!.

No, more like torture
Slowly biting at me!.
Making me suffer
Every pinch going into my body!.

You’ve taken everything
Abandoned me!.
Left me here,
To die!.

Yet when I am so close,
To the light!.
I see your face,
And everything’s all right!.

I have hope in you!.
Because, I know
through this torture,
There will be victory!.

The victory will be you!.
The best gift of all!.
And through the battle,
I will win it all!.

So lets forget the fights,
End the war,
Dream of happiness,
And make me soar!.

Flying through clouds,
Bringing me to heaven
Forgetting anything,
Has ever happened!.








Because throughout all this
I have learned
That loving you
Makes me gain much more

We will start over,
Restore my soul!.
Patch me up,
And end this war!





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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I am a former literary consultant and teacher/college professor for 26 years, so with all due respect, you asked for what I think of it, here goes, I rate it a 'B'!. And thats pretty good coming from me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's pretty good!. I like how you contradict yourself!. It's a little choppy but my writing can be that way too!. Keep it up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its verry good! your classmates will be impressedWww@QuestionHome@Com