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Position:Home>Poetry> My POEM tell me what you think? PLEASE ?Question: My POEM tell me what you think!? PLEASE !? The Shadow:
There is a shadow on the wall I sit and stare all day long It grows and grows till it splits to two I really dont know what to do My heart is racing My mind is blowing There is no tell which way its going My mind is split Up is down Right is Left My world is crashing all around Thunder lighting Its a storm I'm so cold yet so warm Its so quiet and I'm so alone I wish I could just go home But I know I'm stuck Nowhere left to turn So I guess I'll sit here and burn Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: It's not bad!. It lacks form a bit!. The words you use are very simple and sometimes repetative!. It could be a bit more creative!. But a solid start!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Beautiful really!.!.Wow *_* very nice you are talented :)Www@QuestionHome@Com You should make this your profession!. It's really very goodWww@QuestionHome@Com Its great yoWww@QuestionHome@Com really good poem - ^_^ Loved it!! <3Www@QuestionHome@Com luv itWww@QuestionHome@Com |