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Am writing a gross story to use with a 3rd grade class Halloween party!. Am going to put items in a covered can/jar that they have to stick their hands in and feel (maybe blindfolded) while I read a story!.
I wrote it in poem form because i didn't know how else to start it!. Some of my lyrics are pretty bad to say the least!. Was hoping you'd help me clean up a lyric or two and maybe come up with a good story ending!?
There once was a Goblin all wrinkled and old,
Twas a spooky night when he died, rainy and cold!.

He tripped on a tree stump and out popped his eyes,
They were squishy and round and filled with surprise!
(peeled grapes)

He lurched to collect them, but his hair it fell out,
It was scratchy and stiff and the wind scattered it about!.
(stretched out brillo pad)

Then out squirted his brains, a great oozing mess,
The Goblin was dying, but he could care less!
(pumpkin innards)

His blood started boiling as it raced thru his vein,
He twisted and wriggled and writhed in such pain!.
(catchup mixed with warm water)

Then, his guts they exploded and were spewed on the ground,
They were cold and slimy and piled in a mound!.
(cooked spaghetti & sauce)

All of a sudden the Goblin realized he couldn’t even hear,
A gust of wind had come and loosened his ear,
(a dried apricot)

It fell off with a plop, and then the last thing to go was the beat of his heart,
It was the final thing on his body to fall apart!.
(a real chicken heart)

Last lyric stinks the worst in my opinion, but I don't know what else say for heart!? Suggestions!?
And I need a last lyric to wrap the story up!. Ideas!? THANKS!!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
"It fell off with a plop and his heart beat it's last!.!.!."

Then you could say something like,

"When the children all saw him they ran away fast!"

It's not great but it opens up the rhyme a bit more!. Good luck with this, I think it sounds great fun for halloween - kids love this stuff!
Www@QuestionHome@Com

hmm !.!.
If you dont want them to cry dont use this!.!.
why dont you make something funny on things about
Halloween!? Www@QuestionHome@Com

Okay!.!.!. how about starting your poem in not the old fashion way!?
How about using an alliteration !?

Cough cough ! !.!.!.

Oh and this is nice!

Ways to write good poetry
1!. Have your syllables, words and stanzas flow!.
2!. Start a new stanza when a change of idea, rhythm or rhyme occurs!.
3!. Create natural rhymes!.
4!. Do not rhyme!.
5!. Create emotion!.
6!. Say nothing more than what needs to be said!.
7!. Write about life!.
8!. Write about nature!.
9!. Give details!.
10!. Don't be shy to write something personal!.
11!. Study and imitate other poets!.
12!. Try different styles!.
13!. Variate your words!.
14!. Write about a controversial subject!.
15!. Tell a story!.
16!. Write a song!.
17!. Use a thesaurus!.
18!. Try different types of meter rhymes!.
19!. Try different types of vowel rhymes!.

Use elements of poetry
20!. Use metaphors!.
21!. Use similes!.
22!. Use assonance!.
23!. Use onomatopoeias!.
24!. Use alliteration!.

Use the five senses
25!. Create a sense of smell!.
26!. Create a sense of taste!.
27!. Create an image!.
28!. Create sound!.
29!. Create touch!.

Ways to write bad poetry
30!. Write about a boy or girl who you like but likes another girl who likes some other guy that likes you but you don't like him!.
31!. Try to rhyme every sentence!.
32!. Try to rhyme words just for the sake of rhyming them!.
33!. Write a three line poem, regardless of how many syllables or words are used, and claim it as Haiku!.
34!. Write a four line poem and claim it as Haiku!.
35!. Write a story but make a new line after every sentence!.
36!. Write a poem and don't create lines or stanzas!.
37!. Write about an honor you received that no one else cares about!.
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carez, and best o luck!
~fiazioWww@QuestionHome@Com

Your poem was great and I hope the Halloween Party goes well! I think that the last lyric was fine !.Www@QuestionHome@Com

First off fiazio your crazy, rhyming is the most skillful things you can do with poetry it makes it memorable, good for beat too!. geez, some one cant rhyme well I guess!. Any ways no your lyrics are fine for 3rd graders, perfect actually!. You want to keep it simple for them as they dont understand or comprehend serious themes or big words!. It will be fine and its very creative!. things that rhyme with heart: tart, cart start, art, dart, or smart, and those are just the one syllable words, good for kids!. Dont listen to anyone telling you not to rhyme to children, they love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com