"Swept Away and Into"
Step into my heart!.
Feel the heat's embrace, listen--
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Step into my heart!. Feel the heat's embrace, listen-- the music is yours!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I'm very partial to Senyru's / Haiku and yours is perfect!. You even followed the 2L rule !.!. the -- Nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com There is an enchantment to your words, I will always have time for one of your poems!. This is a beautiful poem of love, of the heated embrace of the heart!. There is music is in the attending heartbeats, two hearts as one!. Really lovely poem!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com i like it =] very nice haiku!. maybe you could turn it into a string of haikus by adding more relevant to the same topic!.!.!.like a set of 4 haikus or something!. but i like the way every word matters!. you take one away and it messes up the meaning of the poem!. good job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com So sweet! So delicate! So romantic! Such three lines, surely 'd suffice!Www@QuestionHome@Com Oh, yeah, I really liked this, so glad I took the time for your three! maWww@QuestionHome@Com Very nice I love the last line (including listen)!.!.That by itself could be a poemWww@QuestionHome@Com A sweet melody indeed this Haiku! And today of all days, I feel like dancing!Www@QuestionHome@Com I always wanted to learn to tango!.!.!.your Ku reminds me why! Well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com |