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Question: Please read this (I am serious about improving)!?
I'd appreciate any tips!.

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INEVITABLE DEATH

I am an empty soul,
Echoing the crashes
of childish love!.
Oh, how it was easy,
To give, to live, to be
To smile, to frown, to cry
Never bothered by
Inevitable death, or
By shattered glass!.
Scraped knees and
Spilt milk were
The entirety of
Our troubles!.
But with every
Second, minute, hour
We lose that
Shield that protects
Soft, flawless skin
From the world!.
Wishes are replaced
With bruises and scars
Hidden by long sleeves!.
Each drop in the bathtub,
Blood and tears,
Goes down the drain
For all the times we
Could have saved, could
Have been saved!.
No time for regrets,
Though, when clocks
Like bombs are
Watching, even when
You’re screaming in
Pain!.

“I could fade away,
But then who would
Make you look good!?”Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This is awesome!I don't have the knolige to critec work of this level,I sugest you get an allpoetry account,jusdt look it up on google and it should be there,there are loads of experranced poets there and groups and forums,best of luck and keep writting!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its really really good! Its very discriptive which is a problem I have in my poems since I write them more like lyrics!. I wish I could write like that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good, good, good!. You've got talent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com