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Question: IS MY POEM OKAY!.!.!.!. CRITIQUE!?
i look in the mirror what i see is not clear
flat at the moment, the future is near
a heaping load; mimicking a ball
round; an orange lacking the flavours i call
i look down to thee
no, the look down on me
all will be well at last
the cause is behind me; my past

walk beside me, always sure to give a glance
awkward sight; not by chance
eye contact diminishes; disipates
hinder to say thoughts; no mandates
society; close minded
criticizing; already binded

human nature to make mistakes
i sit and wonder; a toll it takes
confused from the start
why stare; does society lack heart!.!.!.


i think its pretty abvious what its about!.!.!. so ya!.
thanx!.


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Yes it is obvious what this poem is about, but it is very good! I really enjoyed reading it! Way to go, you did very nicely!Www@QuestionHome@Com

love it! good job! and i love your poem!. did i say that already!? did i say that i love your poem!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

OMG!! That is the best poem ever if i had to rate that from 1 to 10 i would give it a 10Www@QuestionHome@Com