Tell Me What You Think Of A Poem I Wrote?

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Yes Victor Has A Touchy Side!? Tell Me What Ya Think!.

Baby, nothing's better than you and me
I look around an all I see
Is love and laughter and memories
Baby, you and me, we both know
Our love will do nothing but grow
You tell me things I've never heard
Your words come to me like a singing bird
I look at you and start to smile
Because then I know it's all worthwhile
I sit and think of you and me
Thoughts of love just come to me
You're my world, my heart and soul
Deep inside, we know the goal
The goal for us is the be together
From now till then we'll last forever Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

love it! I am printing it up for my hubby, but you get the credit!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think its Lovely, I like writing poems myself and that one could bring any one to tears (of joy)!.

The lines are all good they rhyme, but after the first two u put 'memories' that line doesn't have one to rhyme with!.

Try this:
Is love and laughter,memories
lives joint as endless seas

Again love the poem its Beautiful!.

Ps!. I think 'the' in the second last line is 'to'Www@QuestionHome@Com

If you are giving this to someone it's truly wonderful!. But as a stand alone, it could use a little more pizazz!. Try to use something that hasn't been written before!. It's really nice, don't get me wrong but I've seen this a million times!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i really like your poem!.!. it's really romantic
but,, when i was reading your poem, it's like more of a song than a poem!.!.
but your poem is really cool,, i really like it!.!.
=)Www@QuestionHome@Com

A mind clear and innocent,
I think you are a Bunyan!.Www@QuestionHome@Com