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Question: Your opinions please on my poetry!. I am considering trying to publish but don't want to make a fool of myself!?
Title: Blue Velvet

Like the deepest blue velvet so deep and
complex wanting to envelop every party of
me!. Like velvet, so inviting!. When I look
into them, they move me, to have them look unto
me is to experience a feeling of completion
I have never known!. Deep and intense with a
hidden happieness!. A happieness which one
would only be allowed to experience if he
lets you come close enough to touch his
heart!. So gentil in their own world only to
be compared with the soul!. Like velvet, at
times so difficult to handle yet worth the
time and patience to experience!.

Title: Who Is the Man!?

By definition, who is the man!?
The man is kind and caring with a gentle hand
To listen and learn from all the years through
With kindness and understanding shown especially for you!.
By definition, who is the man!?
A man who can be looked to for guidance when
Needed and support through the times when his
Guidance was not accepted!. A man who questions
Not what you do or who you are, however a man who accepts
You for everything you may or may not be!.
By definition, who is the man!?
Though not my own, a father who is grand!.

Title: Flowers of Life

When a flower blooms
The petals come
There has to always be that very first one!.
You are that first petal
without which there would be
no flowers in bloom
not even me
Because you are here,
we are all here too
and for this we want to say
how much
we love you!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
blue velvet is good but I feel like the word "velvet" is used too many times, and it's kind of simple!.

who is the man is my favorite!. The beginning has a really great flow I wish it continued that way!. I do like the way it ends though

The last one seems sweet but I don't really understand it!.

anyway I think they're good!. Keep it upWww@QuestionHome@Com

You're very sweet, but these poems won't be published!. Watch your spelling and grammar, for one thing!. It amazes me how often authors seem to ignore the fact that these things exist!.

Read some great poems from inspiration, Leonard Cohen, Margaret Atwood!. A good poem has to inspire emotion in it's reader!. Yours!.!.!. don't!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Then don't publish!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sorry, but I think you should wait a little bit more and work a bit more on your craft; get some more education and training on the mechanics!. Maybe submit your best to some sort of contest, sort of as a way to test-the-waters!. I don't think you are QUITE ready for a significant investment in getting anything published!.Www@QuestionHome@Com