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Question: Does my poem sound good!?
he stepped out from the darkness of the movie house
not a soul around, not even a mouse
he saw a mustang, blue and tuff
and 5 socs came out, bent and rough
they pulled a blade on him, quick and fast
then, here came his brothers in a blast
he and his friend fell asleep in the lot
he went home and got caught
his brother hit him and he ran away
and his brothers stand there in such dismay
he and his friend got some money and a heater
from a friend who got them a train pass for a seater
they ran to a church, abandoned and old
and they stayed for a week in the freezing cold
they lived off baloney and read to kill time
then their buddy came along with a couple dimes
they went back to the church to see the burning ember
two of them ran in, knowing they might not see november
they saved some kids, nearly burned to death
then ended up in the hospital, close to death
one went home, and two stayed
and fought in a rumble, then had it made
him and the other ran to see their buddy
he said stay gold, then went to the cubby
one of them was the other on the way
then was shot under the street light and was taken away
the last one saw he was failing class
so he started on a theme awfully fast:
he stepped out of the darkness of the movie house
not a soul around not even a mouse!

what book is that from and does this sound good!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It is good!. But it drags on for too long!. And perhaps using a different array of words to take away any slang would be a good move!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

The poem is ok, but i think it could be improved in areas, like using better words than just simple words and describing it more!. It sounds as if a child has written it, but it is stil imaginative and good !.!.xWww@QuestionHome@Com