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Question: What is your opinion of my latest Ocean poem!?
A Plea To Ocean

This day, my Ocean, sing to me
In soft, clear tones, poetically,
Make known your presence through the night,
Your ebb and flow when out of sight!.

With gentle voice, please call me near,
All vengeance gone, erasing fear,
As you in splendor sing again
So I may enter your domain!.

Oh, would that it be ever thus
That I be free from mortal dust,
And with your waters I might meld
Throughout Eternity, be held!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
While reading this, I see a beach house, 2 stories with a widow's walk on top, New England style, with a wrap-around porch with steps leading down into the sand!. I see you standing between the porch and the sand, with a long translucent white flowing dress being windblown, with moonlight glowing through the gossamer material!. Staring out to sea, singing this song as you stand there, melding your soul with that of the great ocean!. Well written, and well read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I stopped suddenly at "free from mortal dust" and then engaged again to "And with your waters I may meld'
Through-Out Eternity be held"
Reason being, that I think often of my deceased brother's ashes having been cast into Loch Ness, and because I have not wanted, NOT even one particle of "dust" to float alone, even if mythical Nessie be his companion, I know can come to imagine by favour of your poem, that the waters have caressed him into the nothingness, that last stage, soon to become the next : Eternity, be his!.!.!.as Eternity in time shall be ours as well!.
This is no critique, Miss Elaine, it is my reaction, for on certain days I can not respond to poetry!. I do not know the reason why!.
I still do KNOW when a poem touches me, for a subterranean reason as your poem has managed find and dig into!. And to me, IT has been resolved my brother's peace being finally in the ONE which is ALL : Eternity!Www@QuestionHome@Com

A lovely gentle request on your part, how could the ocean deny you,But
when it must I feel the ocean is tearful when denying your request!.

I had no trouble with the flow of again/domain at all, the poem rolled
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Wow Elaine!. This is spectacular!. The poem flows in meter and rhyme!. The theme is particularly poignant!. I can feel the Ocean calling me!. Well done my friend!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very nice flow!. This deserves to be read aloud to feel its song!. My compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The beats are all there :) Great flow!. Stumbled a bit on the rhyme of "again & domain"!.!.!.!. until I used the King's English for again!.!.!.!.:)

I'm seeing your Ocean as Poets!.!.!.

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"!.!.!.free from mortal dust!."

The cleansing of the Ocean!.

Beautiful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your ocean poems are always pleasing to me!. I'm glad you post in the wee morning hours so I have them to enjoy first thing with my coffee!. Very calming!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The only American who ever said, "A-gain" was Thurston Howell III!.!.!.ha ha!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I hope your stormy, rainy weekend is over, and that Ocean sparkles!Www@QuestionHome@Com