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Question: Would you leave this as prose or put it in poetry form!?
This post from last night was just deleted for chatting!. And so, I post again!

My Little Gift

We gathered in the courtyard, carrying our gifts for the One who sat upon the throne!. We had been told to bring them wrapped in boxes with ribbons neatly tied!. Sheepishly, we looked at each other and at the boxes we held protectively against our chests!. Oh, dear, I began to worry, mine was so small compared to the others!. Would it please Him still!? One by one, we approached His Light, our gifts we placed at His feet!. He opened them, looked inside, simply nodded and said, "You're forgiven!." Our boxes held the worst of things, from hatred to abuse!. Our sins we were to bring to Him!. With lowered eyes, my turn had come!. I knew I had not gotten it right!. He took my gift, opened the box and looked at the single thing there!. His eyes met mine and they did glow! He smiled and said, "Welcome, my child!." You see, I couldn't name all my sins, instead, I filled the box with my heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's prose!.!.!.the end of something!.!.!.

Now write parts 1 and 2!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it works beautifully as prose!.!.!.!.!.it is a beautiful piece!. I am finding it a little hard to imagine how it might look and how it might flow in poetry form!.!.!.!.but I am sure that an experienced and talented poet could make it work that way, too!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's a very good prose, but would work really awesome as a poem as well!

Bless you!

I would, unfortunately, be one of those with the big boxes as in the past I committed many sins and still am not close to being perfect!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Leave it as prose -that's how you wrote it, don't second-guess yourself!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You didn't need to wrap it, he could have just seen it on your sleeve!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

if it came out as prose, keep it as prose!. don't force itWww@QuestionHome@Com

Leave it as prose Ma!.!.!.
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Leave it as is!.
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I love it just the way it is! What a beautiful way you have of putting words together! God Bless YOU! (((hugs)))Www@QuestionHome@Com

Hmmm!.!.!.!. def prose!. Poetic sins would scare me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that was so touching!. leave it in proseWww@QuestionHome@Com

Awesome! It's perfect and just how it would be to!. I love it!. The heart is the best gift!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm going to say poetry but make sure it doesn't read like a Hallmark CardWww@QuestionHome@Com

Lovely, All God cares about are our motives, We are none perfect
our journey is hopefully progress, if one was perfect there would be no reason for Jesus sacrifice!. Amazing Grace how sweet it is!.
Check my motives, clean house trust God!. Lovely Prose!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Leave it as originally intended Ma!. Your little gift has been given twice, and that makes it twice as nice! Www@QuestionHome@Com