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Question: New poem on taste and language, comments and critique!?
Whence and whether I derive my jargon
Arcane from green chrysolite to argon
Figures precious little in the bargain
Between valued saffron and marjoram

Magnesium silicate's valuable
Colourless argon's imperceptible
With designation chemical
Fragrant stamen and leaf are both herbal

Why should one be common the other rare,
And how should these in value so compare!?
Measuring decorum by what we see
Makes no valid sense to one such as me
Words seem such vain and arbitrary things
Setting tastes as sacrificial offeringsWww@QuestionHome@Com


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I've been reading your poem (on/off) most of this morning!.

Your point ; We (my buds and I) were thinking last night at an art "opening"!.

A sculptor had arranged a few blocks of marble "strategically" in the middle of an "open space" !.!.!.!. then mingled with the bewildered, waiting for feedback!.

Playing safely I asked "from which mountain did you dig the stone" !?



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Honestly, I'm thinking the poets on this site are linked psychically !
I was speaking with a friend last night about the responsibility of any artist to their audience!.!.!.that words should be clear and that a person of average intelligence can figure out the message!. I think your poem expresses this and I thank you for writing it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

how do we assign names to things we sense, and how do emotional attachments arise as a result of those choices!? sounds, words, ideas meant to identify for one and for all things that somebody once experienced first!.!.!. fair!? a scrabble player might not think so!

assigned without thought for the future,
and given one time in the past!.
the words and the names,
still wild and yet tamed,
alphabetically permanent cast!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

An interesting point of view!. Please post this on the Forum for further discussion:

http://www!.poetsofmars!.com/index_copy(58!.!.!.

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Thats is so FUN!!!! (A Scientific Poem, saweeet)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it, but I don't like that 'argon' is used twice without any poetic cause!.!.!. what about xenon or radon!?Www@QuestionHome@Com