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Question: How does this poem sound please be honest, i wont be offended !?
I wish we would have stayed friends

In the beginning I swore id never hurt you, but it has to be this way!. I never felt you there!. I never found love in your eyes!. I'd go to hold you close, you'd push me aside, and even tho I never felt nor cried, faking every moment tore me apart inside, and now the day has come!. I have to do what must be done, reveal my self a liar!. and even in this mess one thing was true!. i never lied, when i said i love you,Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
wow I love the poem,
try and structure it more like a poem:

In the beginning I swore I'd never hurt you,
but it has to be this way!.
I never felt you there!.
I never found love in your eyes!.
I'd go to hold you close,
you'd push me aside!.

And even though I never felt nor cried,
faking every moment tore me apart inside!.

And now the day has come!.
I have to do what must be done,
reveal my self a liar!.
And even in this mess one thing was true!.
I never lied, when I said !.!.!.!.!.I love you!.


can you check my poem please!?
(may not be as good as urs)
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Totally contradictory but that gives it a certain charm!.

Think about layout so it is more easily read that way it will be better appreciated for its emotional qualities!.

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I like this!. Very much!. I would suggest as Zahrah has!. The work is lovely though!. Keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its good, talking about the real things in life and not super sappy like describing a sunset!.
Good Job
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It was really good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com