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Position:Home>Poetry> Have you ever thought what your "Final Thoughts" would be?Question: Have you ever thought what your "Final Thoughts" would be!? Final Thoughts
Have I done all I could have done!? Did I love perfectly!? Was life a worthless spinning wheel, going to no where fast!? Will those who knew remember me, our moments will they treasure!? If my name they speak at all, will it bring joy or sorrow!? My time draws near, I know it now, difference at all did I make!? Life extinguished with close of eyes!. I did what I could, I loved!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: that would depend on what i'm doing in my final moments!. i think that unless i have a sudden, violent type death, i'll have a feeling of peace!. edit!.!.!.i was in the hospital once with pneumonia, very ill, and i was semi conscious!. i sort of thought i was on my way out!. i remember feeling so peaceful, and that things here didn't really matter!. it was very strange yet comforting!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com It's very direct!. One comment on syntax and one on concreteness!. Syntax: The construction on putting the verb at the end of the sentence ("our moments will they treasure," "difference at all did I make") is sort of a 19th century contrivance and seems "posed!." It distances the narrator from the reader, in my opinion!. Concreteness: The old injunction for poets, "Show, don't tell" comes to mind!. Here are a couple of examples to illustrate what I mean!. "Did I love perfectly!?" is an abstraction!. What does it mean, to love perfectly!? What's a concrete image of that!? Something like "Did I shield her tiny frame from any gust that might have knocked her down!?" "If my name they speak at all, will it bring joy or sorrow!?" I would be more apt to FEEL your meaning rather than INTELLECTUALIZE it if you said something like "When they speak my name, will the words be warm as June honey or stiff with frost!?" Show, don't tell!. But it may be that you want the abstract! So really it's up to you to decide what would make you pleased with this poem!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Excellent, excellent, excellent! If Only in Your Memory What more do I ever think of!? I can't live life without knowing the end is always near, and yet I do dot live it in fear!. The time is short and even when it is long; where has it gone!? All I remember is the love that I wronged and the love that was like a passionate song!. When I take my final breath, my thought will be of you before death!. Keep me in your heart too, when I float around you!. Maybe that way I can be lively a little longer if only in your memory!. One sign, Eve ?Www@QuestionHome@Com Yes I have thought of my final thoughts and I think they would be very similar to the words in your poem!. For example, I know I will think 'did I do enough for my loved ones, did I achieve all the things I wanted to achieve, did I make some difference in the world even if it was just a small one!?' Thanks for the reminder, of not to waste time and to live life in the best way I can!. Www@QuestionHome@Com I hope my final thoughts - would be ones of looking forward and passing with no pain (I'm a chicken at that)!. I have already spent a good stretch of hospital time - I have already examined my life - being sad over things I could not change (and did wrong)!. Things that I did right - would have to be judged by others - I can only guess at them!. To live what life I have left - with love - and hope that I have made Someone proud ?Www@QuestionHome@Com Another beautiful offering from you!.!.!.!.you certainly have a way with words! As for my own "final thoughts", I have never really given it much thought!. I suppose this is probably because I am still young (I turned 31 last May)!.!.!.!.and I hope I still have some time left! Having said that, I am sure I remember fearing for my own life as I lay in a hospital bed a few days before my 19th birthday (I fell seriously ill with an intestinal obstruction a couple of weeks before I turned 19)!.!.!.!.or feeling quite scared, to say the least!. But even at that point, I don't think I really thought about "final thoughts"!.!.!.!.my mind was elsewhere!. Thank you for sharing this one!Www@QuestionHome@Com I think that thoughts are determined by your feelings at that point and by what has happened in the past, leading up to that point, so personally I feel it would be impossible to say until you are at that point, or very near!. You are what you have experienced, and you do not know what you will experience until it happens!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Since we're not perfect certainly we've never done everything right all the time!. There are many many things we've done that I'm sure made GOD smile!. Then there are times when we could have done better!. Remember the Bible states that whatever we do, no matter how small or seemingly insignificant, do it with all our hearts!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Mine shall be, "Hmm, I rather did enjoy this dichotomous experience called Life!.!.!.Who'd a thunk it - I'd feel SO - this late in my life!? Well, merit must be given where merit is deserved! Thus : Thank you both my Father and Mother for having introduced me into EXISTENCE!Www@QuestionHome@Com I've never considered this question until now! This is a very thoughtful (and thought provoking) poem!. My thoughts I think might be - I am an infinitesimal thing Memories will quickly fade Missed briefly by family and friends No other impact have I made!. Www@QuestionHome@Com i would have to say that it would be, man i am glad i was good to many and now it is time for my world to end!. Www@QuestionHome@Com My last words will probably be something like "Hey guys! Watch this!" My final thoughts will probably be something like "Oh this is going to hurt!"Www@QuestionHome@Com !.!.!.remember the SDF!.!. remember the SDF!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Don't I know it - but !.!.!.!. I've got so many moments yet to treasure to dwell on that!.The angst would give me heart failure!. nice, but intimidating to me, will I emerge from that tunnel!?Www@QuestionHome@Com I believe that I too, will be thinking about how I loved!. how much I loved and how I will always love!. Our bodies die, but we do not!. Our souls are love!. And love lives on and on!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I already have these thoughts, hope to leave them behind on that final day!. Be too late to change a thing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I've never thought about my final thoughts! Now, I probably won't be able to think about much more than that! Thanks for always keeping my brain wheels spinning, ma! (((hugs)))Www@QuestionHome@Com My final thought: Finally, I am to be reunited with those I love who were taken from me in life!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Yes!. Your words are beautiful!. The thoughts behind them pure!. I am more selfish I fear!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Beautiful,[ she says with a tear in her eye!.] Got me thinking Ma, for sure!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Possibly "Arrrghhh" or "Geesh what is that pain shooting down my left arm!?"Www@QuestionHome@Com This is lovely, ma!. Actually I've been thinking about it quite a lot lately!. Don't know why!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com did i leave the coffee pot on!?Www@QuestionHome@Com |