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Question: Ok, i know it's too short and not very good!.!.!.!.!. !?
But i really want to try and turn this into a song!.!.!.!. would it be worth the time!?
I walked through a garden of statues of stone,
Trying to remember, where was home!?
I cut off a rose and held it by the thorns,
But when I walked away it was with burns!.
Sometimes I feel like a puppet with strings on my limbs,
Bending and dancing to everyones whims!.
I'm staring at your face frozen as death,
Salvaging whatever empathy's left!.
There was a long silence and stillness of heart,
We were all ready for the singing to start!.
Finally again the hourglass tipped,
The strings on my heart shattered and ripped!.
I retreated again to my garden of stone,
Why oh why can't we go home!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That is really good, and that would totally be worth your time!. I really like it!. Good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com
well it really depends on the tune!. i write songs too, and if the rythum and stuff is bad, then the lyrics dont even matter!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Not worth it, because it doesn't actually *mean* anything!.!. it's just phrases that sound really poetic but are really really cliched and empty
write something REALWww@QuestionHome@Com
Do some repeats to make the song longer! =D That's what musicians do =] That's an awesome song by the wayWww@QuestionHome@Com
definatly worth it :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
its ok but like i don't get it!.!.!.!? like its really nice nd like intense yet slightly confusing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com