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Question: Is this a good Poem!?!?!?!?!?I need answers!!!!!!!?
is this a good poem!?!? i really like writing and i was just wondering what you guyss think!.!.!. here goes!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

Waiting
On the sidewalk sat a young girl!.
With a stuffy nose, came lots of tears!.
Because now she knew, and always would,
Mother had left, and for good!.
She left because daddy,
She left because of her,
She left because nothing would work out right,
She left because she cried at night!.
But the one thing she forgot,
The one thing that wasn’t in her suitcase,
Was her love for her daughter,
And now what the little girl knew was that,
Mommy was never coming back!.
No matter how hard she prayed,
Or even cried in bed,
Mamma had left, and forgot!.
Forgot about her daughter, to who she had said two years before,
“Love is a very strong word!. And I am using it for you, because I love you so much”
And the one thing the mother didn’t know was that you can’t FORGET anything, even what you say to your precious daughter, to whom you will be leaving for some other little girl, to start and new life, and eventually leave another innocent girl and father waiting!.



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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This poem is very sad, but that what poetry is about!. Poetry is expressing our feelings and and what we think about other elements in life!. It's not just writing or rhyming; it is more than that!. And 'that' is what I see in your poem!. In other words i LOVE it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

make it more mysterious and general so more people could relate!. this poem is very sad but pretty good!.!.!. although i think you should write stories instead!. it really is too long for a poem (i mean each line doesn't fit)!. its a very good topic to write a story on!./\Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is a good poem :) i liked it a lot
if you wanted to write formally i think it needs a little work in places,
but if you like a free-flowing, natural and less structured style then it's
fine as it is :) hope this helps
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YOU WROTE IT!.!.IT CAME FROM YOUR MIND!.!.SO DONT DOUBT IT BEING GOOD!.

I LIKE IT AND ITS SAD & THROUGHOUT READING IT, I PICUTRED IT IN MY HEAD!.!. THATS A GOOD SIGN ;)Www@QuestionHome@Com

it is very sad but good at the same time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It needs some work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

omg but good


meaning i agrree



sad but goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

oh that was depresssing but very goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

This is very sad, but it shows promise!. Don't over think the work you want to create, just write from your heart and soul!. also try not to muddle the work with so many similar lines!. Try being a little clearer or the readers will get confused!. also spell check is our friend!. I know of from where I speak, I've been writing poetry for almost 40 years!.Www@QuestionHome@Com