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Question: Would you consider this to be a good piece!?
I wrote this, with inspiration from the following picture:

http://i5!.photobucket!.com/albums/y154/jf!.!.!.

Is this home!? Is this where I am meant to be!? A lonely place where I actually feel at ease!. A place where the screeching wind is silence, where the bitter cold air makes me feel warm inside, a place where!.!.!.a place of horrific beauty!.
I look around wide eyed, wanting to step forward, I want to embrace what this world has to show me, I ultimately want to be free, yet something is holding me back, a part of me I necessitate to let go of, but what will my identity be if I do let go!.!.!.Will I still be me!?!.!.!.

I unwillingly pick up the courage and take two steps, leaving imprints on the world, two more steps and!.!.and I start crying, I feel pain, the throbbing pain in my heart bleeding through my body, taking over me!.!.!.I collapse!.!.!.


While I sit on the cushioned snow pick up a ball of cold flakes, I let it melt through my fingers, I look up to the pure white sky, I smile, I breathe heavily, my heart beats exploding within, frosty tears roll down my face, I smile once more, I know…I know this is home!.!.!.time for me to embrace it and explore!.


You can add ur own parts if you like!.!.!.
and please comment on mine!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow! Would I consider this to be a good piece!?! It had me totally captured!!! I LOVE IT! I can't think of anything I would change!.!.!.!.Zahrah!.!.!.this is a masterpiece describing perfect beauty just like the picture! You've got to email me the rest of your poems and stuff like this! Www@QuestionHome@Com