A poem.... your thoughts, opinions, etc.?

Question: A poem!.!.!.!. your thoughts, opinions, etc!.!?

"So would you!. !. !. if you had been"
Two of the soldiers (behind)!.
Older bombardments(!?)
Pretty marching!.
"Sloppy", said the younger, "!.!.!.they are"
Distant sounds of gunfire!. (from "them"!?)
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

hmm different!. i liked the pretty marching and the end is very blunt and definitive!. seems a little too odd, out of place some lines!. it fits yet doesn't maybe that's what you were going for!.

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