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Question: What do you think of this poem about african!.i am more thank glad to see you comments please do!?












help me with spelling and punctuation english is my 5th Language



Why!?
Why would you do such a thing!?
Many of kind die for name
But you toke them a way with in your self what a shame
I am living a life of identity of shame
You game me a skin a skin smeller to yours
Today I am your son tomorrow I am you dictator
When will I learn to actually love you!?
You make it easy to hate, hard to love
At the same my heart want let me
Please stop with ur excuse I have to live,
let me be!.
ur kids crying ,women dieing
Man’s sick-out of there mined
Are u that cruel or just blind
All you wealth taking by other others
not like your kind
in return you get weapons ,for your kind to fight
eye for eye makes your kids blind!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
For English being your fifth language you didn't do to badly!. Let's see, Why would you call yourself a living identity of shame, that's not a good start!. You gave me a skin similar to yours!? Today I am your son!. Tomorrow I am your dictator!? I'm just wondering about this line!.
At the same( time) my heart won't let me!.
This next line I don't understand!.
Your kids crying, women dying!.
Man is sick of their mind!.
Are you that cruel or just blind!?
All your wealth is taken by others!.
Not like your kind!.
In return, you get weapons for your kind of fight!.
An eye for an eye makes your kids blind!.
The last line is powerful!. I like this last line!. The poem needs work!. I don't know if I could correct everything since I didn't know what you meant to say but you have a good idea going!. Keep trying and keep studying English!. It's one of the hardest languages to learn!. Www@QuestionHome@Com