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Question: I've written this poem, and i'm thinking of a title, 'unattempted suicide'!?
i've written this poem below!. Basically its about a girl (in this case i've written about my self, fictionally)!. who is so depressed that she cuts her self a little too much and then realizes that its too late!. so she dies eventually at the end!. i was thinking of the title 'unattempted suicide' but in the poem it seems as if it was attempted!.!.thats how it seems to me anyways but heres the poem please tell me if the title works or not!.
thanks!


Wake me up after I die
drowning myself from these
streaming eyes
killing my pain so softly within me
sitting here crying,
watching the blood drip down me!.

Swollen wrists, why can't I stop!?
this pain starves me with every drop
buried under my own skin
its hurting me inside
again and again!.

tearing myself under this strain
continiously crying, pouring out rain
lying under this putrid soul
bleeding so noxiously out of control
becoming so intense, this pain I can't bare
I'm holding on myself, choking out air
breathing so faintly, thinking in despair
this is only a dream, it can't be real!.

I'm screaming inside, I can't hide what I feel
lying by myself, waiting for these wounds to heal
gripeing at the blood flowing down my hand
holding it between my fingers
watching it sink between like sand!.

Letting myself drown by these tears over flown
helplessly breaking every nerve, every bone
I've fallen into a disaster of my own
leaving myself to die, selfishly all aloneWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That is really good! I read your additional details and I'm sorry that you are depressed and I'm sorry about whatever made you that way!. I know how it feels!. Earlier this year, for about 6 months, I cut myself!. The only reason I stopped was because I got help from my family!. I write poems too, which also helps me get my anger and depression out!. It's funny how just by writing your feelings down you can feel a whole lot better!
Oh and I like the title "unattempted suicide"
yes, the poem sounds like she meant to do it, but the readers would get that she didn't if you applied that title to it!. I think that's the way to go!.!.!. writers have to be a little mysterious sometimes
Good luck writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a strong poem!. If I were you, I would show this to a person you trust, like a teacher or a minister!. If you have no one, Please Call 1-800- SUICIDE / 1-800-784-2433; Call 1-800-273-TALK / 1-800-273-8255!. Ask them where you could publish this!. Or ask them who might be interested in this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

WOW! That is really really good! I love the title!. This is very deep and sounds like you have experienced with this!. If so please if you need it or know of someone that needs it get help!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Deep Red; UnawareWww@QuestionHome@Com

That's pretty good!. How about "Failed Suicide"!?Www@QuestionHome@Com