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Question: I Have Seen Dead Birds Everywhere (care to comment)!?
They speak to me of shadows!.
Their hallow vertebrae contorted into the sinister shapes of crooked fingers!.
Tufts of hair like angels with holy pulpy guts spewed across the blue gravel of fallen light!. Of descending darkness!.
Small hearts that once beat effervescently haunt me among the golden leaves of fall!. Dying chlorophyll!.
Each unique, but all alike in their fragility--in their thunderous implications!.
Probing ebony spirits bewitch my eyes and from a well behind my brow buckets of tears are raised!.
My lips are tombstones that are a testament to the dead!.
That speak of nothing but the dead!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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*Sigh* a masterpiece!.!.!. I feel a little jealous, but I'll comment!
My favourite line is 'dying chlorophyll', it's short and concise but elegant and snappy!.
All I would say is I don't really like 'buckets of tears', it sort of interrupts the flow of the poem which is otherwise rich in vocabulary!. Maybe think of another vessel!? Www@QuestionHome@Com
If your seeing allot of dead birds in your neighborhood you should call the CDC because they could be carriers of west nile virus
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Wow! I love it! x]
Its both sinister and beautiful at the same time!.
You have talent =]Www@QuestionHome@Com