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Position:Home>Poetry> How would you like to read and give ur views when HEAVENS ARE WITH YOU?Question: How would you like to read and give ur views when HEAVENS ARE WITH YOU!? WHEN HEAVENS ARE WITH ME All along my years gone by Never did I cry, as I always knew, Heavens are there for me!. I need not have to care nor fear, More dare, When heavens are there For me to care!. I know not the whimsical ways, The machinations, The wickedness, callousness too Of human behaviour and what have you!. I know not the wiliness of a distraught mind Nor behind the fa?ade of cunningness, How to hide I am na?ve I know this fact , But with heavens I have a pact!. The heavens are within my sight, They also always know my plight, Heavens know how love I display, What all I can, also I do give away!. Well when heavens are with me, Oh for anyone else I damn care, Heavens please remain for ever to see, What others are doing to me!. Only heavens know, who are with me!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Dear Vision, As I do not have your email address my remarks will have to be made here!. The meaning of your poem is made very clear where your relationship with God is concerned!. However the setting out of your poem needs some attention, and as we are friends I will take the liberty of suggesting some changes to the first stanza only!. Though all my past years have gone by there was never a reason for me to cry!. I knew that heaven would be there for me!. I had no reason to care, no reason to fear for my god in heaven will always be near!. I have used the name God because heaven is but a place of waiting for the resurrection!. So it is not heaven that is waiting for you but your god!. In the last stanza you use the phrase "Oh for anyone else I damn care" As there are some uses for the word damn, I was wondering just how you intended us to interpret this words meaning!. To damn can mean "to condemn", or it can mean "extremely" or a meaning that would not get you to heaven would be to use the world damn to mean that "you do not care" If this poem is a true reflection of yourself, then the poem is full of innocence which also gives innocence to its setting out!. Robert Www@QuestionHome@Com |