Some more poems, what a surprise.?

Question: Some more poems, what a surprise!.!?

Mirror, Mirror on the wall,
I've always wondered who would fall!.
Me or you, who would crack
Me no doubt, since no one has my back!.
Society's perfection, the only mold!.
You must be smaller and taller to reach the gold!.
Its impossible to reach it,
Everyone has fools gold, so counterfeit!.
I wish I was deaf to all there lies,
All the untruths that you imply!.

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I stopped coming to the poetry section because these people aren't poets!. They have no structure!. But here I find the opposite!.
My lord it's structure!
It resembles the fourteener, only a bit reversed in the beginning!. But it corrected itself ultimately, with a meditative statement to close the verse!. I like it and have no criticism (who am I anyways!?)!.
Just try to use less words (in the middle of the poem) to make the same point!. It'll run smoother!. And thank you for this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really like the first two lines and I like the idea of the rest!. A few things that you could change:

If by "you" you're referring to the mirror, then "You must be smaller and taller to reach the gold!." doesn't make a lot of sense!. Remember to be consistent with point of view and who you're talking to!.

There lies = their lies!.

Its impossible = it's impossible

also, I like the word "untruths!." Very cool!.

Sometimes, the rhymes in your poem feel forced and sort of screw with the flow!.

Overall, a good idea!. Could use some revision, though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love the fact that the beginning is from such a well known rhyme
and then you used it to help make your own points, which are really good, and I completely agree with what you said and your outlook on society today
great job! :]
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