Okay! What do you think about this poem?

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Question:

I love sitting in the morning dew,
Wasting all my time with you!.
You sit looking down,
Smiling as I wear my usual frown!.
Playing a sweet melody,
On your acoustic music machine!.
You softly hum, I start to smile,
Pausing the time for a while!.
You run your fingers through my hair,
I blush as you stare!.
We sit in silence for hours,
Sitting among the tall meadow flowers!.
You hold me tightly as I rest,
My head on your barren chest!.
We sing sweet melodies,
As we make beautiful memories!.

-By Eclat

Now for my questions:
Do you like this poem!?
What should the title be!?
Should I add/subtract something!?

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I think you should call it Beautiful Memories!.
And, I'm no professional or anything and I don't really know about 'flowing words' or 'stiff rhymes' but I think that your piece really works, it feels right and I can picture it in my mind, so I don't think you should change anything!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

How bout a days perfection!? I find that would be a fitting title!. Over all a good poem but you destroyed it when you said "on your acoustic music machine!." You should of said something like "while drifting through dreams" or "with you at my side" think about that change but over all good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its cuteWww@QuestionHome@Com