Please Read and Critique this?

Question: Please Read and Critique this!?

I don't know how to fix it
I don't know where to start
What can someone do, for a dying broken heart!?

Because it keeps on getting trampled
and it Keeps on getting torn!.
Proving the idea, there's no reason to be born!.

I don't know what I was thinking
I don't know why I tried
I know that you were honest, and never- ever lied!.

We were doomed in the begining
We were doomed the day we met!.
So now the end has come, nothing more to fret!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

whoa when I read this, i felt my heart separate into two! you should enter this in some poetry contest, because it has both flow and rhyme ( and makes sense to boot!)
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its fine the way it is!.
i love it!.

read mine!?
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Really good!. Why don't you continue it!? More, please!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love this a lot!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

loves it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Awesome poem! I felt like I was the one with the broken heart!. It gives so much description of how you feel!. Love it!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is good!
it almost feels like there could be a little more at the end, though!.
other than that though, awesome job!Www@QuestionHome@Com