My poem "Who are You?". Please tell me what you think.?

Question: My poem "Who are You!?"!. Please tell me what you think!.!?

You intoxicate me!.
Every breath!.
Every touch!.
I'm yours,
Powerless to your gaze;
I see all I can
When you touch me like you do!.
Take me away!.
You have my heart,
You fought and won!.
Now all I can see,
is you!.
Forget the world!.
Forget the drama!.
We're here!.
We're now!.
You're touch,
steals my very being!.

Let this never end!
Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

That is a very well written poem! Each line is vivid yet simple!. That's what poems should be: vivid :) I loved reading it and imagining its every part!.

However, I found a misspelling in your poem: <We're now!. You're touch!.>

It's supposed to be "your" not "you're" since you're means "you are" And, well, I'm pretty sure you don't want it sounding: <We're here!. We're now!. You are touch>!.!.!. right!? (correct me if I'm wrong at this point)

Anyway, LOVED your poem :) You're talented in this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

if your poem! so that my lyrics

I do not want to take the hearts of people
because the writers have not been stabilized

Victoria flying
take a rose
behind the clouds huddle

I'm not a thief
I only ask hearts

poems you describe the emotion of a good spirit but less than ever

regard

JulWww@QuestionHome@Com

Hey its nice !!!!! But to make it the best it requires sum rhyme and 1 thing i have to say is tat one line is either too long or the other is too short!.!.!.!.Usually u got to have lines tat r approx of the same length!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Otherwise it was tooo good!!!! Keep it up!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a misuse of the site!. The purpose of Y!A is to ask questions, not post your crappy poems for review!. It's not even a place to post good poetry!. THIS IS NOT A LITERARY REVIEW SITE!! Kindly desist!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

ya dats a gud 1 but i dont think dat itz a poem !.!.!.!.!.!.!.coz i dont find rhymes!.!.!.!.!.!

but still have a gr8 1 out there!.!.!.!.!^_^Www@QuestionHome@Com

lol sound like love at frst sight or something!. love it!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I Love It!

Please Best AnswerWww@QuestionHome@Com

This is a good one!.Www@QuestionHome@Com