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Question: Poem is in ideas stage and is in need of work all suggestions welcome!?
Everyday I wake I am waiting
all the time I am forsaken
So is it meant to hurt
like religion without a church
All the missed changes
a victim of circumstances
I promised you to try
within the truth there is a lie
So feel me
hear me
so feel me
Same story different ending
if time heals then mend me
love will tear us apart
then destruction is the start
So feel me
hear me
so feel me
lady luck has raised the stakes
the games that adults play
there is no one left to blame
when things don`t go your way
So feel me
hear me
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Its very emotive and wonderfully written !.!.
The days pass in sombre gloom
Etched on faces a tender bloom
A quiet knowing for you are loved
And it is better unspoken said
Fate turns its hands and blindly deals
We abide by laws and tears heal
And wield in turn of equal wounds
Meted with a raging doom!.
It is well and done and yet
Anger gnaws away the heart
A quiet ire who would hear
Or care another soul in darksome dread
Life is wonderful and tormented too
Love and beauty peace abounds
What matter is not in my heart and soul
Wanders wanton in other minds, other climes !.!.!.
The world is a stage our destinies made
In haphazard tone and brings
News of wonders and tragic truths
And remains, here in somnambulance
!.!.!.
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So feel me,
Hear me,
Touch me!.
That is what I would have put!. Otherwise I think it is a nice little piece!. I certainly ,Heard,and Felt!.
I dare not say I touched!. HM hm!
Though the words touched me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com