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Question: (untitled poem) opinions anyone!?
i can call you stupid
because its proven that
im stupid too
i go against the things i say
but hide all those things from you

i can point out all your flaws
because i have plenty of my own
im messed up and have issues
im ripped and poorly sewn

i can ignore all the things you say
because i hardly listen to myself
maybe i should every once and a while
but i doubt that its going to help

i can blame all my problems on you
but im the one to blame
i cant seem to just let go of my past
and its my sanity the skeletons claim

youre screwed up
im screwed up too
he's screwed up
so what do we do!?

well im in the process of finding out
until then just pretend im not here
youre doing pretty well so far
just please dont let me disappear!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It is pretty decent from a poetic standpoint, however a few parts don't make much sense and lack depth!. Ok overall!. 3!.75/5Www@QuestionHome@Com

"I'm ripped and poorly sewn"

"and its my sanity the skeletons claim"

I LOVE those two lines!. The poem is pretty good :)
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REALLY REALLY Love it :)
unlike mine, its long, but not so long :)
REALY good, love it
try editing!?

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