How would you improve this piece?

Question: How would you improve this piece!?

Seeing Clearly Can Hurt

One by one, scales fell from eyes
placed by no one, but own choice
sweet bliss found in ignorance
became deadly double edged sword
comforting yet stunting your growth
deceiving served but short term cure
long term proved self destructive
pain truth brings now clearly seen
must be met head on to proceed!.

Hang on, my son, I cry out to you
take my love as you walk hard new path
turn not from life's harsh realities
scales came off because you received
healing touch from the Master's hand!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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One by one
the scales fell from eyes
placed by no one
but choice
sweet bliss found in ignorance
became deadly double-
edged sword
comforting yet stunting your growth
deceiving served
but short term cure
long term proved
self destructive pain
truth brings now clearly seen
must be met head on to proceed!.

Hang on, my son, I cry out
to you!.
Take my love as you walk
the hard new
path
turn not from life's harsh realities!.
Your scales came off
you received
healing touch
from the Master's
hand!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

My mind closes suddenly if someone asks how I may improve someone's work!. I see that as robbery!.
Every artist must make the effort to move from first impression to last!. Anyone who interferes, is interfering in a sacred project, which is the artist TOTAL responsibility!.
Sorry Ma!. But I do not touch anyone's work - even if asked! Just as I never ask anyone to interfere with mine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

just that it's not a new path!. Hi ma!. :) Oh I see!. You mean the hard new path!. I haven't given up yet!. I never will!. But this way is so easy!. The other path is so hard!. It's amazing that this thing is not a private line!. But I'm glad it's not when it comes to you!. As long as you aren't watching over me too much!. :) It's a good poem! Trick or treat!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

beautiful !. !. some times it's really hard to trust God's Healing Hand, but we have to!. AmazingWww@QuestionHome@Com

Once again the lady who feels she is not a poet stuns the literary world with another heart rending verse fit for the Gods!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Hand deliver itWww@QuestionHome@Com

I am glad to see your "vow" not to post poetry anymore has been annulled!. LOOK at what we'd all be missing!
(((HUGS)))
ReenieWww@QuestionHome@Com

A slightly more cursive font, maybe in red with a kicking little green border!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

You did ask :o)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I would not presume to do so Ma!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sure glad I didn't miss this one!.Well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I wouldn't touch it!. It is quite lovely and touching!. ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I wouldnt change anything!.!.!.I thought it was greatWww@QuestionHome@Com