Read this short story.?

Question: Read this short story!.!?

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It was good, but I wanted more!. I wanted to know about the stripper and Ryan!. What happened to them!? Why was this girl so angry!? I thought the transition from dancing on the pole, to sticking a knife in the ex-boyfriend was too fast!. Needed more tease, mystery!. Still, not bad for 10 minutes of writing!. Keep it up, and correct the spelling before you post!.
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Your description of the events are unique!. The story that seems like it is meant to shock me doesn't!. I watch tv!.!.!.!. so does everybody else!. Bunch of spelling errors!. I would say it's good!. 6!.47 had potential!.
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