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Question: I don't think I've posted this one!. I kept passing it up!. Do you like it!?
every ounce counts

step up to the scale today
time to weigh-in time to pay
for all those croissants for all that pie
for every day you do you die

eating seems no fun no more
what once delighted’s now a chore
we crunch and chew on tasteless fiber
no more a glutton no more imbiber

times have changed from days of old
clean your plate mama would scold
then in she’d bring the chocolate cake
or lemon meringue a prize she’d baked

and life went on and we grew stouter
we had no reason to ever doubt her
but now i’m harried cholesterol
high blood pressure one and all

too much too much we cannot fake
our appetites this vast intake
and doctor says you must not smile
until you’ve walked or run your mile

let’s face the facts the time has come
the mighty ounce has finally won
he shouts in loudest decibel
you must be slim you must be well

the battle of the bulge goes on
from soup to nuts filet mignon
all the goodies we behold
are measured first the hot and cold

today the question of which fork
to pierce into the piece of pork
though etiquette is fast upstaged
the war on fat is loudly waged

the table’s turned now less is more
my lo-cal spills, a crashing bore
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
this one is the best! it is more for the adult, but, yeah, it is great!. and you say you are a fork lift driver!? unbelievable!.
hey, david that killed goliath was a harp player!.!.!.go figure!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I HATE this one - You've reminded me of how old and out of condition I am! (ha, ha!)

Just kidding! Actually, it was pretty good!. Although, I think I agree with Grannyjill's poetic response - your free verse is, in my opinion, essentially better!
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But when ma said "clean your plate" -
it was when you couldn't wait -
to dash outside with friends and take -
your baseball or football or whatever -
heaven's sake!.
To burn the calories so tomorrow -
you could eat cake!. ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well, every word of this is true
It talks of me, it talks of you!.
But, I prefer when you don't rhyme
Since then your poetry is sublime!.
But, don't let me stand in your way
Perhaps this poem will make the day
Of those who like this type of verse
Sending message (precise but terse)!.
Rhyming couplets, perfectly done
War with words, fought and won!

Just playing around, old mate!. I do like this !.!.!.!.!.it is just unexpected from your pen (keyboard!)






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