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Question: What do you all think of this poem!.!.!.!?
I wrote this when I was somewhere around 10 or 11, I can't remember, but even though I wrote it when I was so young, it's still one of my favorites!. I hope you enjoy!. Please give me honest answers!.

WHO ARE YOU!?

When I'm wrong and I don't do things right,
You are the one beginning all the fights!.
I wish I could tell you that you need to stop!.
You are not my father, oh, no sir, you're not!.
Don't tell me to do this, or do that, or pick this up
'Cause it just won't happen, so sir, not this pup!.

Who are you to tell me I'm wrong!?
Who are you to make me go home!?
Who are you to tell me no!?
Who are you to tell me I have to go!?
Who are you to tell them I'm wild!?

You are not my father, and I'm not your child!.

When Mother says something, she's the one I listen to!.
You are not the one to tell me what I can and cannot do!.
When I don't clean my room, she get's onto me!.
This has nothing to do with you, can't you just see!?
Don't take this the wrong way, matter of fact, please do!.
This is my life, this is my willing, this is my youth!.

Who are you to tell me I'm wrong!?
Who are you to tell me to go home!?
Who are you to tell me no!?
Who are you to tell me I have to go!?
Who are you to tell them I'm wild!?

You are not my father, and I'm not your child!.

I can do what I want if it's okay with my mother!.
You can't tell me what to do, not me or my brother!.
I'll never listen to you, not once, not ever!.
You made my father go, no sir, you're not clever!.
My daddy hates you, so I hate you as well!.
I'll never come around to you, nope, can't you tell!?
You can't tell me what to do, you can't rule my life!
The only one who can is my mother, your wife!.

Who are you to tell me I'm wrong!?
Who are you to make me go home!?
Who are you to tell me no!?
Who are you to tell me I have to go!?
Who are you to tell them I'm wild!?

You are not my father, and I'm not your child!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
First of all I wonder did your feelings for him ever change!? As for the poem congrats for writing such a piece at the age of 11!. You wrote with a lot of passion which is always the place good writing comes from!. I hope you have continued to write since this poem, if so please post more so we can have the pleasure of reading your work!. Oh and before i go just remember that people only have opinions about our work but our passion for what we do and our shown vulnerability is what makes us modern day poets!. So never be discouraged just always write from the heart!. Take care xxxxWww@QuestionHome@Com

i think its very clever!.!.!.
it shows how you feel!.!.!.
its pretty good!
love it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I loved it!. im a step mom hope my step son never feels this way about me thoe!. mabey he should have tried to be a better figure in your life ehWww@QuestionHome@Com