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If you care enough to spend you're time reading it, the first part is here: http://sharepoetry!.com/poem/29112
To understand this part it isn't necessary to read part one!.
This is long, but worth it!

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The next thing I know,
I’m laying in the cold ground!.
It was all like a dream,
too close to perfection,
too close to absolute joy!.
But then, the hole that was my chest
told me it turned to a nightmare!.
Or did I just wake up!?
It wasn’t just my heart you stole;
it was my lungs,
my mind,
my soul!.
How do I breathe!? It’s so hard; everything hurts!.
What I would give to be numb!.!.!.or just less pain…
just deathly torture,
not this torture that is ten times worse than the unknown, lingering on the best memories, the worst wounds!.
Those sweet, believable lies…

A shock runs through my veins!. What is this!?
Anger!.
No, I always knew that I wasn’t good enough for an angel!. Yes,
it is anger!.
Hate!.
Passionate hate, I hate myself through and through!.
I made me lose you, and so I lost the world,
the universe!.

My hands are clutching something colder
than the soft cement I lie on!.
What is it!.!.
Dull…dull!.!.!.sharp…very sharp…
terribly, blissfully sharp!!! I realize!.!.

A knife!.
The closest thing to peace runs through my body!.
With all my strength,
weak as I am, I raise my arm,
and with it the blade,
Above my chest,
Let it fall!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This a very well written and structured poetry!.What really struck me was the spontaneous approach that you adopted that seemed to sway with your instant thoughts and feelings!. I see an internal conflict between an ideological approach which is about happiness and joy and your more bitter thoughts which blend with the former to create your psychological and philosophical identity and view point!. I myself am a poet and can better relate with your perspectives!. One last thing KEEP WRITING!.YOU'RE VERY GOOD AT IT!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i let my friend read it, and she said it's also cool!!! :D

it's so wonderful!!!

it's a wonderful poem!!!

i know this, cause i'm a writer myself!.!.!.!.

and your poem is fine!! wonderful!! absolutely wonderful!.!.!.!.

but you can also write poems about other stuff!.!.!.!.

try writing about a friend or your loved ones!.!.!.

sure enough that ur creativity will become more noticeable!.!.!.!.

keep it up!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

the speaker in the poem is emo and stupid!.
(the SPEAKER not the writer)

this could be a monologue of a character in a movie!.!.in a stream of consciousness type of scene where he's about to commit suicide!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Where's my cookie!?Www@QuestionHome@Com