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Question: Illousin in poem ,read and tell me,!?
The coldness started long time ago
In my life where thunders play games
Where I have no one to ask
Just myself to blame
The winter will never end
Maybe I will just polish the snow
With colors of tears
If my tears stain
Like ink
On the tarter blouse
Hope you are happy
Because even though I feel bad
No one can feel for you
But me
Why am I so dumb
Why do you still there
Swinging in my ribs
Giving me all the sweetness I crave
Taking all the love i hate
Do you really know
Or do i!?
Maybe we are just lost
In the medieval of our spirits
I breath
Shallow breaths
I need deep diving into the sea of freshness
And I want to be alive again, and warm
I will close my eyes again to dream
The fear in my heart is so hard
Like a storm
And I don’t know what I m writing
My pain is writing me
I hate to be in love its so humble
Go away ,I will enjoy my snow man
If my man is snow
If my dreams are ice flakes
Melt once they meet my fingers
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Sounds like its a poem about a person whose brooding over a lost love and feels all cold like winter inside!. Perhaps they also have got to the point that they don't want to stop brooding!.
"Because even though I feel bad
No one can feel for you
But me"
Indicates either unrequited love, or lost love!.
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There is no such thing as "illousin" in poetry!. If you mean illusion, that's not really a poetic term either!. If you mean allusion, this means that something refers to something else that is unlike it - stop signs allude to car accidents, for example!. Stop signs are very unlike cars, but a lot of accidents happen where they are!. Most allusions work because the writer and the reader share something in common, like familiarity with the Bible or mythology!.
The poem is a typical teen age effort!. I like the line "my pain is writing me," but the poem needs work!. What is a 'tarter' blouse!? Tartar sauce exists, and the Tatars were a people who conquered Russia, but to use this to describe a blouse is very odd!. You also seem very confused, but what else is new with teens!? Keep writing though! Every great poet started early!.Www@QuestionHome@Com