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Question: What do u think of this poem!? the candle light!?
The candle light

It is the candle light
against the dark
the peace mark
through a solo fight

It is the candle light
My eyes for sight
Surrounded with the darkness ghosts
Wanting to blow it away
So that shine will never be

As the candle glows
The darkness grows
And the candle is getting shorter

Will the light ever win!?
Or will it surrender!?

Will the candle bring PEACE into the world!?
Or is that just a made up word!?

Will the candle spread its light!?
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I love it!. =] Normally I find hopeful poems cheesy, but this was very good!. The one thing I would change is the capitalization of peace!. I see that you're trying to enunciate peace, but it was a little much!. I think if you leave it at a capital P it would work a lot better!.

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I'd give it 6!.5 it's creativie yet it needs a lot of work and most of it is just Not a poem ! sorry but you need to equal the amount of words in all the lines it's just like you're putting the monalisa a beard ewwwwww!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com