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Question: Is this poem any good!? If not can you improve it!?
It's a poem to my crush detailing my feelings for them!. The title will be her name!.

I remember my first glance at you,
Already I was stricken and there was no going back
These feelings I have can't be real,
Every second spent with you feels like a lifetime!.
But just one is surely worth my life!.

Words do you no justice,
For too many are needed
Perfect, beautiful, captivating, addictive
These do not even begin to describe you

To gaze into your eyes!.!.
Is to stare into heaven itself
Day after day I lose myself in them
Such a privilege is not worthy of mere men

To be graced by your presence alone,
Makes me wonder whether there is a god!.
For such beauty is no accident

I feel pain down to my soul
For everything I've ever done
That has hurt you
I plead for your forgiveness

insert name, may I have the honour,
Of being your lover
I will never mistreat you,
And I will stay forever faithful

Don't rush yourself
I will wait nigh forever
But I beg of you
Do not take too long
Love lasts all eternity
But only so much torture can be taken

As I wait for your answer
I will be thinking of you
And praying you accept me

So is it alright!? Could it be improved in anyway!?
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
its cute =) you should give it to her!. i love it when guys give me poems!

help please!?
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send it to her it will melt her heart and bring a tear to her eye GOOD LUCKWww@QuestionHome@Com

9/10

good,could have been better with rhyming!.
hey,dont take to this to heart ,take it sportingly!.
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