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Question: My attempt to write a dark sort of poem!.!.!.Your opinion please!?
Very Scary Things





The monsters in my dreams are very scary things



Yet they have always been my dear and closest kin!.



Cruel and cackling hags, dark stampeding stags!.



Howling as they ravage, lustful, vicious, savage!.



So strong the family ties, so long the pain and lies!.



These monsters follow me in anguished agony!.



Longing for their souls of which they’ve lost control!.



This evil from within my dear and closest kin,



Has set them forth to hell!. Fear I may go as well!



From them I cannot hide!. With God my soul abide!.



Divine love saves my soul, my heart now takes control!.



Mine eyes no longer see forced, cold, dark agony!.



The pain has now subsided, my destiny is gently guided!.



Strong are the bonds of love, yet gentle as a dove!.



Love it’s self is being, hearing, feeling, seeing!.



Heart, soul and mind enlightened, I am no longer frightened!.



In love’s pure divinity my spirit is now set free!.



Though from time to time, these thoughts come to my mind!.



The monsters in my dreams are very scary things!.



Yet they have always been my dear and closest kin!.



Falling tears as rain, empathizing of their pain!.



If they could only see, pure love’s divinity!.



Forever now I pray by divine love’s saving way!.





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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
A very nice poem, Maggie!. Sort of fits in with the Samhain time of year, except that it's, like you said, so very dark and somber!. Yes Samhain IS about death and endings but without endings there can be no beginnings and as such most of the Witches I know do not look upon death as something somber but rather as a time to celebrate new beginnings as old things come to a close!.

Brightest Blessings,
Raji the Green WitchWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's very believable!. I like it alot,and it flows nicely!. It's 'dark', but not like in a "i'm depressed so i'm gonna write a poem" sort of way!. Muy Bien!

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