My heart is black
There’s no sun
In my world
I hear nothing
Except the silence
My mind is clouded
My vision is foggy
Every step I take
Is into darkness
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Position:Home>Poetry> Care to critique me poem =] ?Question: Care to critique me poem =] !? My heart is black
There’s no sun In my world I hear nothing Except the silence My mind is clouded My vision is foggy Every step I take Is into darkness Any suggestions welcome =]Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: i love dark poetry!. good job love! x)Www@QuestionHome@Com Short and sweet!. Love it!. Now, I know everyone pretty much hates these comments, but if a talented poet like yourself could check out my poetry, I'd be honored!.Www@QuestionHome@Com the poem is good but i suggest that u see the bright side in every thing around u Www@QuestionHome@Com |