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Question: What do u think of YOUR EYES lovely eh!?
YOUR EYES
There is something I see beyond
The sadness in your small eyes,
The distance beyond the horizon
They see so clearly, with an eagles vision!.
I see your eyes so seemingly lonely,
Trying to catch a lost vision
And as I see you wondering around,
Your eyes in them, depth I have found!.
For their in them I see a lost mission,
A seemingly lost transmission,
also in then I experience, truly,
A life’s unending mission ,cruelly
Of enduring love of truthful glance
Of a lost but seemingly known trance,
Yes in those lovely demure eyes
A new, an enlivened Vision, does rise!.
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I love it :' )Www@QuestionHome@Com
Um!. Not really!.
It has the feel of something trying too hard to be poetic, but lacking substance!. The 'poetry' has choked the poem (there is one in there somewhere) to death!. Sorry :(
Perhaps if you tried rewriting it a little more simply and plainly it would appear more genuine and less showy!?
'Beauty is truth, truth beauty,—that is all
Ye know on earth, and all ye need to know!."
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I like my eyes they are green!.Www@QuestionHome@Com