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Question: Another poem just for you!!?
I just wrote this after staring at the moon probably a little too long!.!.!.
The Dark Side of the Moon
The dark side of the moon is calling me
whispering things in my ear!.
telling me of old melancholy,
of dispute, disease and fear!.
Now i know why the wolfs cry to the moon,
this invasion of your head!.
Old and mysterious,
a book yet to be fully read!.
so now even i cry to to the moon,
every night!.
Trying to get free this pestilence,
away from this fright!.
People think i'm crazy,
maybe i am!.
locked up in an asylum,
but innocent as a lamb!.
Can't you see!?
In times like this logic is of no use,
only a poor,
folly ridden excuse!.
So i'll rot in a straight jacket,
my knowledge of no use,
while you'll sleep well at night,
peaceful with excuse!.
critiques please!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I really like the beginning because it has some rhymes by the end it kind of trailed off and I got bored of reading it!.
But either way, it was still good because it was your feeling about the moon and you got right to the spot, used details on a small subject!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is a wonderful poem
it's about the moon!.
Poems come when
a person get an idea
Yours for example the moon!.
The line of staring at the moon
too long!.
I don't think it's harmful
compared to looking directly at
the sun!.
One line in your poem I found interesting
now I know why the wolf cry to the moon!.
I would say because the wolf is more
active in the evening when the moon is out!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
u should make people pay to read ur poems
make a book and u could publish it and it would sell it for 100 bucks each and u would be famous!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I'm sorry I love it! It's so insporational! You are very encouraging!Www@QuestionHome@Com