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I Sit

It rains,
Washing away the events of the day,
It pains,
So I sit and I watch and I pray!.
I bleed,
From the wounds that were given by me,
I lead,
The ones who pray for me!.
It stings,
To think of you and your actions,
She sings,
Despite the pain of contractions!.
I kill,
To quiet the voice in my head,
I fill,
My time with thoughts of the dead!.
I smirk,
At the thoughts of an untimely end,
I lurk,
Around every corner around every bend!.
I win,
Every time it ends in a fight,
I sin,
All the time to avoid the light!.
It rains!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I was unsure as to how I should go about reading this—I put a melody to it in my head and suddenly the rhythm had a few lumps and bumps!.

This is really good, though, although I'm not much of a poetry person!. XD I like the concept!. The only part that threw me off was "I smirk"!. I have mixed feelings about this line!. At first I thought "AUGH" because it was the only of the shorter lines that brought about a very specific mental image, but on the other hand I like how it immediately follows the mentioning of the dead!. (:

Overall, good work in my opinion!. XDWww@QuestionHome@Com

This is very interesting!.
the rain is enough to drain away any
outdoor plans!.
I like the rhyming in this poem
The poem talks about praying
along with other actions!.
Such as fighting
It rained at the beginning of the poem
and does so at the end!.
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Ooh!.!.!.I like the meter and rhyme actually!. I don't like the passive line (From the wounds that were given by me)!.!.!.it is always better to avoid passive construction-- even in poetry!.

All in all though, this is a good start!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. It's pretty good!. I can sort of relate that's probably why I like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it has an unusual style
i like it
keep it up ;)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like the different style!.!.!.!.it is refreshing
It is an easy read!.
well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it"s really good, i could see it raining actuallyWww@QuestionHome@Com