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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Mirrors; Some try to disguise what they see, Some never look, Do you know who you could be!? I you just grasped what you see, Who do you see!? Is it someone happy and content!? Or someone held back by pain and fear!? Don't Run, Just lookWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I like it :) A few things - should the 'I' in 'I you just grasped what you see' be 'If'!? In that line, to make the syllables equal, perhaps you could make it something like 'If you just grasped what you can see', so it flows better!. But on the whole, it's really good, especially the last two lines!. I like the message as well!. You have talent :)Www@QuestionHome@Com Is lovely = )Www@QuestionHome@Com Yeah! I really like it!Www@QuestionHome@Com |